【Greyson】自己翻译的歌词。。。求高人指点

Home Is In Your Eyes
-----------Greyson Chance
(verse 1)
My heart beats a little bit slower
我的心跳慢了些
These nights are a little bit colder
这些天，夜晚冷了些
Now that you're gone
现在你走了
My skies seem a little bit darker
我的天空似乎也暗了些
Sweet dreams seem a little bit harder.....
美梦似乎更难以实现
I hate when you're gone.
你走的时候我很遗憾 (表示介句灰常疑惑，求高人指点)
Everyday times passing
每天时间都在流逝着
growing tired of all this traffic
我对这繁忙的交通逐渐生厌
Take me away to where you are..
带我去有你的远方吧
(course)
I wanna be holding your hand in the sand by the the tire swing where we use to be
我想在沙滩上，在我们过去常常荡的秋千旁，牵着你的手
baby you and me
宝贝，我和你
I try with a thousand miles
我尝试用一千英里 （这句不懂啊，，求高人解答）
Just so I can see you smile
只有如此我才可以看见你的微笑
Feels so far away when you cry
你哭的时候我感觉你我如此遥远
Cause home is in your eyes
因为，家就在你眼中
(verse 2)
Your heart beats a little bit faster
你的心跳快了些
There's tears where there use to be laughter...
那些过去荡漾着笑声的地方，如今已被泪水替代
Now that I'm gone....
现在我走了
You talk just a little bit softer
你说话时轻柔了些
Things take a little bit longer..
事情占用的时间漫长了些
You hate that I'm gone..
我走的时候你很遗憾
Everyday times passing
每天时间都在流逝着
growing tired of all this traffic
我对这繁忙的交通逐渐生厌
Take me away to where you are..
带我去有你的远方吧
(course)
I wanna be holding your hand in the sand by the the tire swing where we use to be
我想在沙滩上，在我们过去常常荡的秋千旁，牵着你的手
baby you and me
宝贝，我和你
I try with a thousand miles
我尝试用一千英里
Just so I can see you smile
只有如此我才可以看见你的微笑
Feels so far away when you cry
你哭的时候我感觉你我如此遥远
Cause home is in your eyes
因为，家在你眼里
(bridge)
If I could write another ring a ding
如果我可以写下另一场喧闹？？ （不懂，求高人指点）
This wouldn't even be our song
这甚至就不会是我们的歌谣
I'd find a way where we would never ever be apart
我将会找到一条我们永远都不会分离的道路
Right from the start
从一开始
(course x2)
I wanna be holding your hand in the sand by the the tire swing where we use to be
我想在沙滩上，在我们过去常常荡的秋千旁，牵着你的手
baby you and me
宝贝，我和你
I try with a thousand miles
我尝试用一千英里
Just so I can see you smile
只有如此，我才可以看见你的微笑
Feels so far away when you cry
你哭的时候我感觉你我如此遥远
Cause home is in your eyes
因为，家就在你眼中


自己顶

木有人。。我就洗洗睡了

还是顶一下

这个是我稍微修改了下，为了押韵
Home Is In Your Eyes
-----------Greyson Chance
(verse 1)
My heart beats a little bit slower
我的心跳些许缓慢
These nights are a little bit colder
夜晚也有一丝微寒
Now that you're gone
如今你却早已不在
My skies seem a little bit darker
连天空也顿显昏暗
Sweet dreams seem a little bit harder.....
美梦成真如此困难
I hate when you're gone.
你的离开是我的遗憾 Everyday times passing
日复一日时光飞转
growing tired of all this traffic
往来烦扰加剧我的疲惫不堪
Take me away to where you are..
请带我去往那有你的彼岸
(course)
I wanna be holding your hand in the sand by the the tire swing where we use to be
我渴望在沙滩我们常去的秋千旁与你十指相握
baby you and me
宝贝，就你和我
I try with a thousand miles
我千里迢迢只为寻求
Just so I can see you smile 只为寻求你的笑眼明眸
Feels so far away when you cry
感觉距离遥远特别是当你泪流
Cause home is in your eyes
因为，家从来在你眼中心头
(verse 2)
Your heart beats a little bit faster
你的心跳有点加快
There's tears where there use to be laughter...
曾经的笑声已被泪水淹埋
Now that I'm gone....
现在我要离开
You talk just a little bit softer
你言语如此轻柔
Things take a little bit longer..
物是人非占据生活的大半
You hate that I'm gone..
我走时你也很遗憾
Everyday times passing
日复一日时光飞转
growing tired of all this traffic
往来烦扰加剧我的疲惫不堪
Take me away to where you are..
请带我去往那有你的彼岸
(course)
I wanna be holding your hand in the sand by the the tire swing where we use to be
我渴望在沙滩我们常去的秋千旁与你十指相握
baby you and me
宝贝，就你和我
I try with a thousand miles
我千里迢迢只为寻求
Just so I can see you smile 只为寻求你的笑眼明眸
Feels so far away when you cry
感觉距离遥远特别是当你泪流
Cause home is in your eyes
因为，家从来在你眼中心头
(bridge)
If I could write another ring a ding
如果我可以重写这场喧闹
This wouldn't even be our song
甚至可能不是原来的歌谣
I'd find a way where we would never ever be apart
我会找到方法不让我们分道扬镳
Right from the start
就从故事最初的那个美好
(course x2)
I wanna be holding your hand in the sand by the the tire swing where we use to be
我渴望在沙滩我们常去的秋千旁与你十指相握
baby you and me
宝贝，就你和我
I try with a thousand miles
我千里迢迢只为寻求
Just so I can see you smile 只为寻求你的笑眼明眸
Feels so far away when you cry
感觉距离遥远特别是当你泪流
Cause home is in your eyes
因为，家从来在你眼中心头


谢谢哈~~
8过
I'd find a way where we would never ever be apart
我会找到方法不让我们分道扬镳
这里的way为什么翻译成方法呢？
后面用的是where 如果是方法的话
应该用which或者what


说的也是，不过这样翻译比较好听，有时候不一定要直译可以意译嘛……

哎，英文歌词有时候就是绕人
一个词有很多意思。。。。
其实我当时也想翻译成方法的。。。感觉这样比较通顺。。。
但是看到where。。我又纠结了


谢谢~~~我会继续努力的

哈哈，随性随性，我的语法超烂的！

我语法还OK

顶...
译的好好哦....

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