As I first read the term spring,I came up with some feelings - warm,hope,positive energy-that offer sunshine when we are cold,that deliver hope when we are so desperate,that give us courage when we are so fearful,that create power when we may slack off.As for these active spirits,I call them the spirit of spring.
这是我写的一段，老师说演讲开头不能有两个I，然后后面的平行结构里面的when,...
结构太简单了，不要这么简单的主谓宾结构
所以，大神问题来了，我应该把when we ....怎么修改成高级句式呢？