既然是高中英语,我觉得第一段建议你 it is my pleasure to write等等句式开头比较好一点;第二段注意时态要一致,第二段感觉东西少了一点,你可以加几句溢美之词,比如正是有你们的存在,让包括疫区人民在内的全国人民看到了战胜灾难的希望,让更多的人感受到了医护工作者的可爱与温暖。同时感概一下祖国的强大。 as far as后面的话可以放在第三段开头,i m ... that可以去掉,work together改为 overcome disease together。 另外,第二段第二行 on account of 后面最好跟名词,你可以On account of+你们的付出,that变成逗号。 以上是我个人建议。
1. anti-epidemic frontline, 这个很中式,简单的写...rushed to the epicentre就可以了 2. Regardless of (the) danger跟下面despite the risk重复了,下面一句两个patients也重复;being infected也可以写成contracting the disease/virus 3. 个别名词的复数,比如hospitals
楼主底子好,却掉进了写作误区。以为用不常见的词就会让文章变好(anti-epidemic frontline? extend my hearfelt gratitude?) 却不知道,现实里没人这么用词。 我改了下(当然也不完美) I'm writing to you to express my gratitude for your incredible work in the battle with coronavirus, also known as COVID-19. You and your colleagues put your life at risks when working in the hospital, as COVID-19 is highly contagious and infectious. Still, you have worked days and nights in hospitals, saving lives and helping thousands of patients to recover. Words cannot express my gratitude to you. It is you who make a difference to the pandemic and decrease the motality rate of this otherwise disastrous disease. You are the true superheroes. Thank you all for your effort in controlling the outbreak in this difficult time. Best Regards